tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3029491889310063596.post3689170106710869619..comments2024-03-15T04:38:25.927-04:00Comments on The Girdle of Melian: Haunting - Romantic Friday Writers' BlogfestDeniz Bevanhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/17134553551048836979noreply@blogger.comBlogger16125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3029491889310063596.post-82018109695234166772011-11-02T10:22:59.575-04:002011-11-02T10:22:59.575-04:00Thanks so much Michael!Thanks so much Michael!Deniz Bevanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17134553551048836979noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3029491889310063596.post-52399935410783739352011-10-31T10:28:16.882-04:002011-10-31T10:28:16.882-04:00Hi, Deniz,
I really like this setting... In churc...Hi, Deniz,<br /><br />I really like this setting... In church, Ayten, wearing the same clothes, hinting some kind of tryst. <br /><br />Great tension in the dialogue ... nicely done.Michael Di Gesuhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17047267262428143113noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3029491889310063596.post-47082816695058391212011-10-30T17:25:24.942-04:002011-10-30T17:25:24.942-04:00Thanks Joshua!
Thank you for the detailed read Fr...Thanks Joshua!<br /><br />Thank you for the detailed read Francine and Denise! I'm happy that you liked the characters - I'm writing their novel during NaNo!<br /><br />Thank you Anday, Donna, Anna, Nancy, Adura, Madeleine, Leo,and Kiru. Looking forward to reading your tales!Deniz Bevanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17134553551048836979noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3029491889310063596.post-2625846543228781672011-10-30T15:41:03.676-04:002011-10-30T15:41:03.676-04:00This is my first time here. I enjoyed your snippet...This is my first time here. I enjoyed your snippet. It's a nice read and it got a bit haunting in the end when she talked about hearing her mother's voice.Kiru Tayehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03285263322486836620noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3029491889310063596.post-26880897414844926152011-10-29T13:59:20.328-04:002011-10-29T13:59:20.328-04:00How beautiful, the romance and the haunting elemen...How beautiful, the romance and the haunting elements are both there, and both quite subtle and eloquent! Enjoyed this read!Vinay Leo R.https://www.blogger.com/profile/13132856855570330824noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3029491889310063596.post-11785258614705274832011-10-29T11:46:16.633-04:002011-10-29T11:46:16.633-04:00A sweet tale with a shared moment and a potential ...A sweet tale with a shared moment and a potential blossoming romantic relationship.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3029491889310063596.post-71268123153063781112011-10-29T11:34:18.677-04:002011-10-29T11:34:18.677-04:00Hi,
Definitely spooky...mother reading over her s...Hi,<br /><br />Definitely spooky...mother reading over her shoulder. And the suggestion father might read too...Adura Ojohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10787703060107491771noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3029491889310063596.post-67542656757393466762011-10-29T09:36:46.279-04:002011-10-29T09:36:46.279-04:00Intriguing. You tell just enough to wet our appeti...Intriguing. You tell just enough to wet our appetite. Not sure if the girl will ever care for the boy who obviously has a thing for her. Well written.<br />NancyN. R. Williamshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02174506528962095858noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3029491889310063596.post-11937465820987787722011-10-29T09:30:53.759-04:002011-10-29T09:30:53.759-04:00Dear Deniz,
Nice to meet you! Thanks for sharing t...Dear Deniz,<br />Nice to meet you! Thanks for sharing this lovely text. Your two characters are intriging. I would love to read more!<br /><br />Best wishes,<br />Anna<br /><a href="http://annasadornments.blogspot.com/2011/10/haunting-romanticfriday-writers.html" rel="nofollow">Anna's RFWers' Challenge No. 25 - 'Haunting'</a>Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17926688000745346961noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3029491889310063596.post-66778958066260554312011-10-29T03:04:51.290-04:002011-10-29T03:04:51.290-04:00An argument can keep a romance going :)
These two...An argument can keep a romance going :)<br /><br />These two are strong characters. I liked the idea of her mother reading over her shoulder.<br /><br />.....dholedolorahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08715849844092553699noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3029491889310063596.post-60495312264327641712011-10-28T21:24:12.835-04:002011-10-28T21:24:12.835-04:00Hello.
My first time visiting.
I really enjoyed r...Hello.<br />My first time visiting.<br /><br />I really enjoyed reading this.<br />Great flow and conversation. I too liked the bit of romance in the ending.<br /><br />Thanks for sharing.<br /><br /><a href="http://mypoetcharm.blogspot.com/2011/10/this-unknown-spirit.html" rel="nofollow">This Unknown Spirit</a>The Poethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00667034322952126127noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3029491889310063596.post-32268061660534201842011-10-28T19:35:55.664-04:002011-10-28T19:35:55.664-04:00Hi Deniz! Thank you so much for answering the call...Hi Deniz! Thank you so much for answering the call to play this Halloween! I really enjoy your characters and here we have very likable ones!<br /><br />There was a nice touch of tension speckled throughout and I found the scene at the end when Devran touches her tear very endearing. A lovely haunting tale. <br /><br />I'd like to read more of these characters and I'm sure we will be in for a treat!<br /><br />Happy Halloween!<br /><br />DeniseDenise Covey https://www.blogger.com/profile/07106490051555233439noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3029491889310063596.post-87180791939305696032011-10-28T14:28:59.647-04:002011-10-28T14:28:59.647-04:00Hi,
This scene is very touching given her reason ...Hi,<br /><br />This scene is very touching given her reason for for being there, and I love the way you draw reader attention to the scrolled up paper (?), which is obviously of great significance to her.<br /><br />Her coolness toward Devran implies she fears exposure of feelings she prefers to remain hidden from him.<br />And, his gentle removal of her tear speaks volumes. <br /><br />I don't know Devran as a long-term character or what his position is in the frame of things, but I'm getting vibes his thoughts about her are not always pure in innocence of friendship! ;)<br /><br />Nicely written and atmospheric. <br /><br />best<br />FFrancine Howarthhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02326542867876257042noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3029491889310063596.post-32756540951928545672011-10-28T14:27:15.739-04:002011-10-28T14:27:15.739-04:00Lovely. Absolutely.Lovely. Absolutely.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3029491889310063596.post-24855319715674177422011-10-28T13:24:26.825-04:002011-10-28T13:24:26.825-04:00Thanks Linda!Thanks Linda!Deniz Bevanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17134553551048836979noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3029491889310063596.post-79159522301318079642011-10-28T08:44:08.710-04:002011-10-28T08:44:08.710-04:00Oh, nice moment between the two of them! Thanks fo...Oh, nice moment between the two of them! Thanks for sharing it. :)Linda G.https://www.blogger.com/profile/04576828490765434497noreply@blogger.com