Critique of My First Page

uess who's on Fiction Groupie today? Austin and Kedi from The Face of A Lion. Read Roni's critique and comments from other readers here. And thanks to Veronica for linking to it!
I forgot how much I missed being in Austin's head and world. Perhaps when I've completed the first draft of Rose's story I'll return to Austin's and go through another round of edits.
And he'll definitely be coming to the next house party! Scroll down to message 25 to see Claire's helpful links to all our previous parties.